Paper Edit of Colestine
Fade In -> Title Sequence (V.O. of Cole talking about the process of melting impurities from the metal over a tracking shot of the kilns at ECU.) <- cross dissolve -> Director credit
2 seconds of black
Cut to Cole and friends installing a finished aluminum sculpture on a golf course.
Go into Cole welding and talking about his different types of art.
We then get introduced to Cole's everyday habitat, at his studio working. We also get a feel for the town in which Cole lives (using Super 8 footage as coverage for Varnamtown and Holden Beach.) We also go on a shopping trip with Cole to Robinson's Hardware, giving a sense of his everyday life.
We go into some more of the art process showing Cole working (All JVC B-roll footage with A-roll V.O. of Cole talking about making a cast.)
We will then go into Cole talking about how his childhood and nature are his inspiration for his art.
Then we want to travel back in time to Cole's parents talking about Cole as a child and as an adolescent. (I need to see if the parents have any home movies of Cole.)
Then we are going to travel forward (still back in time) to Cole's time at ECU and touch on his trouble and his second chance.
Next, we introduce Cole teaching at the schools along with showing the pour process of the art. We will show this process with the students and then have a section on one student he helped, Drayton Jones.
Go back to A-roll interview of Cole now teaching Continuing Education classes for Brunswick Community College (still need to shoot this footage.)
Show Cole's finished art and him reflecting and talking about life.
End Credits
Hey Sheena,
ReplyDeleteIt's good to see you've got some structure now (I know it's hard to process a whole film at this stage). After reading your paper edit I noticed there seems to be a lot more focus on Cole as a person and how he makes his artwork, and less emphasis on the story of Cole's troubled past and art as a form of redemption for him. That part is only listed as a "touch on his trouble and his second chance." Perhaps you intend to show more of that than I see written, but for me that was the most intriguing part of the film and I hope you don't phase it out too much. Otherwise, I really like how you are intending to shoot him teaching classes at a community college. It will really show how he's turned his life around. The section on him helping Drayton Jones sounds really interesting too. I'm looking forward to seeing it all come together!
- Matt S.
Sheena,
ReplyDeleteSounds like you've got a good idea of what you're doing. I remember in class you were describing how during the art process the bad metal needs to be extracted from the good metal. That might be a nice parallel for Cole's 'trouble past'. And you could take that further and say that, like his art, Cole has emerged with more meaning and purpose than before. Just something to think about.
- Anthony C.
It sounds great to me. It is going to be a let down though if you can't sell the change. It is centered around Cole and the viewer needs to be as attached, just as much as you are. Can't wait to see the next set of edits.
ReplyDelete-Hunter W.
Sheena,
ReplyDeleteI think you've got some really solid structure laid out here, and I think it flows well and gives a very solid opportunity to include the parallels between his work and his art without being overtly specific. As long as you cover his personal arc in this framework, when you finally show the full process, I think the audience will be able to make that connection themselves. If you do that I think you will have a documentary that will connect to people.
-Matt D.
Sheena,
ReplyDeletethis all sounds great! I especially enjoy the parallels that you are initially setting up in your beginning concerning the metals' transformation process and cole's. The structure you have devised has an order that I think can work, as long as it stays succinct and almost procedural. I know it's a portrait piece and a poetic style is usually applied to such projects, but be careful not to linger too long on certain topics or points of the process. By no means do I mean rush the film, but in order for us to walk away knowing that we have just witnessed Cole's change, we need to be concretely aware that what you are showing us is actually a process. Hope that helps. I cant wait to see some rough cuts and your new footage that is yet to come!
Ryan
Sounds great Sheena! I guess I am just reiterating what everyone else is saying. I see you are focusing more on the work then his troubles and the past. If that is the way you are going I guess I would use the past piece to just show why he got into this work and thats it. But if you wanted to still show his change in life I might put the troubles earlier in the piece. It looks great can't wait to see it.
ReplyDeleteYour paper edit seems well organized and I hope we are able to pull off everything you want to accomplish, especially getting some footage of Cole now. Like Ryan said, even though this piece is going to be somewhat poetic, we need to be sure not to linger too long on certain aspects, hopefully we can get a feel for things when we're editing and some good feedback when we show it to the class. I also hope we can pull off the weaving of artistic process and Cole developing as a person, that would be a great message to get across.
ReplyDeleteOverall, I think you have a solid plan and I look forward to helping you accomplish it!
Two things that stood out to me when I read this were a) home movies b) footage of ECU and golf course... the home movies idea is a great one because now you have images that relate to what they are talking about (Cole growing up). DEFINITELY score the home movies!
ReplyDeleteb) In you previous edit, I don't recall seeing much, if any, footage of the golf course or ECU campus. You may or may not have any, but I feel like while the guys are telling the story about the golf course incident there should be a lot of golf course shots mixed in. Even more, maybe with a re-enactment kind of style where a (kinda hazy) hand held shot, with no actors in the frame, walks through parts of the course or club house. In a sense doing this would be like tracing their steps of the crime. Again, not sure if this is possibly or not but it's just a thought.
Looking forward to the new stuff! Keep it up!